Balthazar Elias Cruz
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Post by salmony on Dec 22, 2022 2:20:09 GMT
Balthazar Elias Cruz Generalities Name: Balthazar Elias Cruz AKA: Eli Age: 21 Gender: Male Race: Human Faction: Independent Squad: n/a Role: n/a. Rank: D Red Orbs: 1000 Blue Orbs: 400 Character Description Physical Appearance(s): Balthazar is a tawny-skinned latino man with a thick body, having big muscles and a healthy amount of body fat, yet with a proportially smaller waist. He has round, broad face with round expressive eyes, often with guyliner. His hair is dyed pink and kept in a pompadour. He enjoys wearing marshmallow-y pastel coloured clothing, cute chokers and chunky "fairy kei" accessories [/b][/div]
Personality: Loud, proud and bold, Balthazar is a bombastic force to be reckoned with. Usually joyous and encouraging, he can also be very abrasive, fickle and cocky... but it all come from a good place!
Backstory Balthazar is a devil hunter through a gift rather than willfully joining a faction. His family's ancestors had connections to the supernatural before the second tear even happened, and were very skilled at the exchange of gifts to a demon noblewoman known as Dama Moura.
This was often in the form of a contract or offering of something she wanted from the human world. Over time the family became almost friends with this entity, and gave more and more extravagant gifts as they were a guaranteed supply of many favours.
Balthazar was fairly young when the second tear happened, attuned to the workings of the supernatural his family were aware and afraid, but Dama Moura had a plan: she would gift him warriorly durability and strength, as well as First Crush, a weapon she'd crafted herself (she was proficient as a weaponsmith and enchantress, showing both in the construction in this bewitching warhammer.)
Unable to aid him any more-she could only do so much, as the family had to work hard for the resources of this trade-Balthazar
He took up odd jobs fighting smaller demons, slowly moving to the relatively bigger guys, nowadays he's a so-so demon hunter but with immense potenntial.
Traits Inhumane ToughnessYou can push through pain and take a sound beating without it wearing you down. This may be because your body is very hard to damage, or maybe because your pain perception is reduced. Whatever the case may be, you can endure a bigger punishment than your peers and push through the pain, making you much tougher to beat. Inhumane StrengthThrough thorough training, natural disposition or some magical modification to your muscle structure, you are capable of imparting a lot more force onto objects in the world. You are capable of performing feats of strength that go well beyond what your peers can do, lifting heavier weights and throwing objects with a great deal more force. Equipment Name: First Crush Description: A giant pink and plum mallet with a love-heart motif, right down to the mallet's "head" being shaped like hearts. Upgrade Points: 2 Upgrades: Aspect-Like Upgrade; Lovely Gift Magic: This upgrade allows this weapon to do magic in relation to creating things that induce positive stimuli, encompassing creating obstacles and projectiles with the effect of causing shallow but intense infatuation that distracts during combat. Visually this manifests as pink, iridescent shimmers with heart shaped sparkles, which forms into a projectile or obstacle. These obstacles/projectiles are not solid.
Combat Foci Name: Disruptor Description: This guy's goal in combat is between being a damage sponge and a misdirector, using high "hitstun" attacks, distractions and deflections in tandem with the grit and willpower to stay standing. Disruptors are very much annoying to fight against, but are slow of speed and attack frequency, one could sneak around them or use long ranged attacks to grind them down. Rank: D Aspects: N/A Techniques
Name: Lover's Quarrel Technique Description: This coats the user's weapon with pink, shimmering magic for a short time. Striking a target will incur a shallow but distracting sense of syrupy infatuation, Growing stronger with how worn-down the target is physically. Focus: Disruptor Aspects: Lovely Gift Magic
Name: Lovebomb Technique Description: This creates a suicide-bombing teddybear strapped with pink dynamite. It can't be thrown far, but will slowly toddle up to the nearest enemy and exploding into pink hearts. This only deals a moderate amount of damage, but the teddy itself has a distracting magical aura of cuteness, once looked at its hard not to come closer or look away. Focus: Disruptor Aspects: Lovely Gift Magic
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Post by pepsi on Dec 23, 2022 12:28:11 GMT
Hey salmony, thanks for applying. Let's begin the review process! I notice there's some weird stuff going around with your code blocks. Rogue [ b] and [ div] that will make your application look kinda messy; if you're unsure what is going on, you can try removing every block in the code and then try to style the application again. If you want to do that, of course. I'd still strongly advise cleaning it up because at the moment it does impact the App's readability. Next, your Red Orbs are still 1000 even if you've used 800. This is because that entry counts the total number of Red Orbs you've gained so far. Moreover, since you bought a weapon with 2 upgrade points, you also possess a total of 400 Blue Orbs. So those two entries should be 1000 and 400 respectively. Lovebomb is an interesting technique, however I see no relation to the fact that it comes from an Aspect-like upgrade of Balthazar's weapon. The Aspect seems to imply that the hammer can imbue love magic with its strikes, but there's no mention of the ability to create something like a physical object (in this case, a teddy bear) imbued with the same magic. Either you can remove this technique or reword the Aspect to make it more clear what the hammer is actually capable of.
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Post by salmony on Dec 24, 2022 15:19:29 GMT
Hello! Thank you for the feedback, i will clear this all up!
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Post by pepsi on Dec 27, 2022 12:23:13 GMT
Your Character App has been Approved. You can now post an exact copy of it in the Updated Character Apps section; you can grab the code from here: [p align="center"][font size="4"]Balthazar Elias Cruz[/font][/p] [p align="center"][font size="3"][i]Generalities[/i][/font][/p] Name: Balthazar Elias Cruz AKA: Eli Age: 21 Gender: Male Race: Human Faction: Independent Squad: n/a Role: n/a.
Rank: D Red Orbs: 1000[img alt=":ro:" style="max-width:100%;" src="//storage.proboards.com/7286694/images/iuIFServ0EVfvUBwSkLt.png" class="smile"] Blue Orbs: 400 [img style="max-width:100%;" alt=":bo:" src="//storage.proboards.com/7286694/images/opMHbUcIbaigOAVfWrND.png" class="smile"]
[p align="center"][font size="3"][i]Character Description[/i][/font][/p] [div]Physical Appearance(s): Balthazar is a tawny-skinned latino man with a thick body, having big muscles and a healthy amount of body fat, yet with a proportially smaller waist. He has round, broad face with round expressive eyes, often with guyliner. His hair is dyed pink and kept in a pompadour.[/div][div]He enjoys wearing marshmallow-y pastel coloured clothing, cute chokers and chunky "fairy kei" accessories[/div][/b][/div] [div]Personality: Loud, proud and bold, Balthazar is a bombastic force to be reckoned with. Usually joyous and encouraging, he can also be very abrasive, fickle and cocky... but it all come from a good place![/div] [p align="center"][font size="3"][i]Backstory[/i][/font][/p] [div]Balthazar is a devil hunter through a gift rather than willfully joining a faction.[/div][div]His family's ancestors had connections to the supernatural before the second tear even happened, and were very skilled at the exchange of gifts to a demon noblewoman known as Dama Moura. [/div][div]This was often in the form of a contract or offering of something she wanted from the human world. Over time the family became almost friends with this entity, and gave more and more extravagant gifts as they were a guaranteed supply of many favours. [/div] [div]Balthazar was fairly young when the second tear happened, attuned to the workings of the supernatural his family were aware and afraid, but Dama Moura had a plan: she would gift him warriorly durability and strength, as well as First Crush, a weapon she'd crafted herself (she was proficient as a weaponsmith and enchantress, showing both in the construction in this bewitching warhammer.)[/div] [div]Unable to aid him any more-she could only do so much, as the family had to work hard for the resources of this trade-Balthazar[/div] [div]He took up odd jobs fighting smaller demons, slowly moving to the relatively bigger guys, nowadays he's a so-so demon hunter but with immense potenntial. [/div] [p align="center"][font size="3"][i]Traits[/i][/font][/p]
[i]Inhumane Toughness[/i] You can push through pain and take a sound beating without it wearing you down. This may be because your body is very hard to damage, or maybe because your pain perception is reduced. Whatever the case may be, you can endure a bigger punishment than your peers and push through the pain, making you much tougher to beat.
[i]Inhumane Strength[/i] Through thorough training, natural disposition or some magical modification to your muscle structure, you are capable of imparting a lot more force onto objects in the world. You are capable of performing feats of strength that go well beyond what your peers can do, lifting heavier weights and throwing objects with a great deal more force.
[p align="center"][font size="3"][i]Equipment[/i][/font][/p]
Name: First Crush Description: A giant pink and plum mallet with a love-heart motif, right down to the mallet's "head" being shaped like hearts. Upgrade Points: 2 [div]Upgrades:[/div][div]Aspect-Like Upgrade; Lovely Gift Magic:[/div][div]This upgrade allows this weapon to do magic in relation to creating things that induce positive stimuli, encompassing creating obstacles and projectiles with the effect of causing shallow but intense infatuation that distracts during combat. Visually this manifests as pink, iridescent shimmers with heart shaped sparkles, which forms into a projectile or obstacle. These obstacles/projectiles are not solid. [/div]
[p align="center"][font size="3"][i]Combat Foci[/i][/font][/p]
Name: Disruptor Description: This guy's goal in combat is between being a damage sponge and a misdirector, using high "hitstun" attacks, distractions and deflections in tandem with the grit and willpower to stay standing. Disruptors are very much annoying to fight against, but are slow of speed and attack frequency, one could sneak around them or use long ranged attacks to grind them down. Rank: D Aspects: N/A
[p align="center"][font size="3"][i]Techniques[/i][/font][/p]
[div]Name: Lover's Quarrel Technique Description: This coats the user's weapon with pink, shimmering magic for a short time. Striking a target will incur a shallow but distracting sense of syrupy infatuation, Growing stronger with how worn-down the target is physically. Focus: Disruptor Aspects: Lovely Gift Magic[/div] [div]Name: Lovebomb Technique Description: This creates a suicide-bombing teddybear strapped with pink dynamite. It can't be thrown far, but will slowly toddle up to the nearest enemy and exploding into pink hearts. This only deals a moderate amount of damage, but the teddy itself has a distracting magical aura of cuteness, once looked at its hard not to come closer or look away. Focus: Disruptor Aspects: Lovely Gift Magic [/div]
We recommend doing it sooner rather than later, as a link to this new thread is needed to gain more Red Orbs. Moreover, as a reply to this new thread, please append the following Orb Gains and Spending template: [b]Divinity Statue:[/b] link
[div align="center"][b]Orbs Gained[/b][/div] ([a href="http://"]link[/a]) Character Approval [Gained 1000 :RO:]
[div align="center"][b]Orbs Spending[/b][/div] (Trait Rank D) Inhumane Toughness [Spent 0 :RO:, Spent 0 :BO:] [Gained 0 :BO:]
(Trait Rank D) Inhumane Strength [Spent 0 :RO:, Spent 0 :BO:] [Gained 0 :BO:]
(Crafted Arm 2 UP) First Crush [Spent 800 :RO:, Spent 0 :BO:] [Gained 400 :BO:]
(Combat Focus Rank D) Disruptor [Spent 0 :RO:, Spent 0 :BO:] [Gained 0 :BO:]
(Technique 1 Aspects 0 Foci) Lover's Quarrel Technique [Spent 0 :RO:, Spent 200 :BO:] [Gained 0 :BO:]
(Technique 1 Aspects 0 Foci) Lovebomb Technique [Spent 0 :RO:, Spent 200 :BO:] [Gained 0 :BO:]
It has already been filled in with your starting 1000 and your starting expenses. [attr="class","rules_title"] Welcome to Buried Light!
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The definitive Devil May Cry Role-play.
On Buried Light, you get to play the role of a Devil Hunter in a modern world that is still recovering from the largest demon invasion to date.
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